When there's night and there's nothing to do,
I get up from my sleep and i think of you,
In my silence and in my sorrow,
Alight a fire, of love that is true,
My eyes burn with tears i cannot shed,
My soul crippled from the ache so deep,
When silence speaks around the world,
In my heart, you, i will keep,
I claw my way through this emptiness,
This void where you should be,
So tell me, love, with hollow in me,
Broken i am, can you see?
My eyes now dry, the screams quiet,
For i let the agony flow,
Let it reach through my whole being,
Let it take me where it'll go,
My arms so empty, my soul shattered,
This o'erwhelming hurt tear through me,
I beg you, love, come take my life,
I beg you, set me free
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really touchin poem!
i loved this part
"I beg you, love, come take my life,
I beg you, set me free"
it shows the love and the pain you are suffering from !
really good!
keep writing and keep loving that someone very special*rolling eyes*
We all have a life, we all have a story. Some have it pretty plain and simple, others, not so straight. Some little twists are perhaps always hidden from the eyes of those who try to understand it, yet cannot reach deep enough to know it; and so, we try, to live as happily as we can, may our efforts go in vain or not, for our part is just to try, to make it as good as it can possibly be. What it does turn out to be, is out of our control, sometimes called fate, yet I rather believe only in the actions of those around us.
anyway, thanks for reading, heads up, another thin coming pretty soon :)
its beautiful.
You've written it simple words ahmad bhai...so pretty digesting and so very emotional.
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waise its better to forget and move ahead rather than suffering.
you are most welcome
For your writings i am quite sure that you recently had some bad experience with someone else that is making you write like this.
Yes we all have stories and fate ,i should say that Try to give others another chance of proving themselves.I don't know you personally but here as a human being i should say that "In my life i suffered only because i didnt listen to the other people who hurt me and i suffered their loss.
It is clear from your writing that someone you loved has done something evil to you.You must be in some relation with her,Did you ask her?What opinions she had?You will be knowing her than shes knows herself.Think from your heart,Can she??
I dont know much about you but i should say What you are going through i too went through all this .I suffered a lot!I remained silent in my time and She left afte she has gone,i have many questions to ask her!
keep writing!
I do understand what you mean, but sometimes, life turns around so radically that you are lost in its twists and turns, and sometimes, you lose the will to go on. Everyone does try, I did too, I failed, and now I walk, alone or not, perhaps with a shrill scream echoing in my silence, yet this is the way it is and this is what we call life...
i just narrated my story to you,jus to make you think what you are trying to do.
God never gives two chances,sometimes we have to take it from Him for us .
I will still suggest that you should talk!
Your story is same like i had,i suffered the loss of my love.I don't even know where she lives or does she exists now or not?={
We never walk alone!Her blessings are with you always if she really loved you .You will know this after every move you make that somewhere she prayed.
anyways I am looking forward for your another beautiful poem from you now!
Shall i expect that now?
a short story is on its way, i would post the start of it, much as i have written it, if you wish to read...
Sure I would love to see a short story from you now.
A change is good.
If you do not mind ,can i know her name?
Actually i wanted to talk to her and know her.
her name, is, life, and that's all to it...
I am surely speechless.
You call her life and still you walk away from her.
sometimes, it is, just so, for reasons that cannot be expressed
That is where you are getting wrong.Moving to the wrong path!
I should not say this but Now you are doing injustice!
hey.....
i dnt have to say that ur writings are beautiful..and they touched my soul.. cuz m the only one in this world who can understand the meaning of all these sufferings... they are more than beautiful more than just words ahmad.. each word carry a soul within it self,,, each n every wotrd is alive.. i can feel it all around me!! :'(
This is not me
from your secret admirer or whatever you call me,
Quite an anonomous fan following uv'e got! Impressive!
yeah you could say that, although it's not really much.
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